2014-07-06

Cross of Knives

At five o'clock is closed the thirty three bar,
but Mario doesn't get off work until six,
if besides, it is his turn for counting the cash, forget it!,
The day almost always breaks him
while María has already got up,
she has tidied up her home, she has even made some coffee,
and she waits him half-naked.
Mario arrives tired and says hello without enthusiasm,
he wants go to bed for another kind of need,
and María dunks her desires in coffee,
cupcakes of the convex sex.
After the work in a big store, when she returns
there is only a mattress support
to use in turn as a taciturn person.

Cross of knives for a woman,
mortal sparkles illuminate at dawn,
blood which dyes of mauve the dawn.

But today there has been a raid at number 33,
so Mario returns at ten to five,
but in his empty street far away, he can only see a couple kissing each other,
The poor Mario wants to die when by approaching
he discovers that she is María with company.

In front of Mario there was three targets, one on his forehead, the most pained, one on his chest which killed him and the another one was said lie in the news.
Two drug addicts, with high anxiety, steal and kill to Mario
while his wife is witness from the doorstep.
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4 comments:

  1. At five o'clock [] the thirty three bar CLOSES,
    but Mario doesn't get off work until six,
    AND if [] it is his turn for counting the cash, forget it!,
    The day almost always breaks him
    while María has already got up,
    she has tidied up her home, she has even made some coffee,
    and she waits FOR him half-naked.
    Mario arrives tired and says hello without enthusiasm,
    he wants TO go to bed for another kind of need (1),
    and María dunks her desires in coffee,
    cupcakes of the convex sex.
    After the work in a big store, when she returns
    there is only a mattress support
    to use in turn as a taciturn person.

    Cross of knives for a woman,
    mortal sparkles illuminate at dawn,
    blood which dyes [] the dawn MAUVE.

    But today there has been a raid at number 33,
    so Mario returns at ten to five,
    but in his empty street far away, he can only see a couple kissing each other,
    The poor Mario wants to die when UPON approaching
    he discovers that IT(2) is María with company.

    ON THE front of Mario there wERE three targets(3), one on his forehead, the most painFUL, one on his chest, which killed him, and the Other one was A lie REPORTED in the news.
    Two drug addicts, with high anxiety, steal and kill [] Mario
    while his wife is A witness from the doorstep.


    (1) better: for a different reason
    (2) Now this is really strange... We would not say "she" here. We would say "it". The "it" either refers to the couple, or is meaningless as in "It is difficult to wake up".
    (3) "crosshairs" would work here too

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  2. I don't know if you can explain the difference between "by approaching" and "upon approaching"

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  3. I think of "by approaching" as the same as "by means of approaching" or "por medio de acercarse". "He got rich by stealing from his employer." "Upon approaching" is more like "When he approaches/d" or "Al acercarse". "Upon talking to his boss, he found out that he had been fired."

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