In April, my
grandmother’s legs became like big red balloons. I thought that they could have
exploded at any moment. But she was walking and doing her things normally.
After some days of doubts, we took my grandmother to her primary doctor.
The doctor diagnosed
that she had contracted a cellulitis. This bacteria infection attacks the skin
and swells different body parts, such as the arms and legs.
To kill the
cellulitis, my grandmother needed a strong antibiotic that compromised her
immune system. For some years, she had suffered from renal problems, so the
doctor hospitalized her to closely monitor her kidney’s function during the
treatment.
At the hospital, a
long journey started.
To be continued.
Alex, good to see you! I hope other things have been going better than your grandmother's health.
ReplyDeleteWhat you wrote is perfect, native English. But I'm sure you'd like any suggestions I can come up with, so here they are. Consider these as "other ways to say it":
In April, my grandmother’s legs became like big red balloons. I thought that they MIGHT explodE at any moment. But she was walking and doing her things normally. After some days of doubts, we took HER to her primary doctor.
The doctor diagnosed that she had contracted a cellulitis. This bacteriaL infection attacks the skin and CAUSES swellING IN different body parts, such as the arms and legs.
To kill the cellulitis, my grandmother needed a strong antibiotic that WOULD compromisE her immune system. For some years, she had suffered from renal problems, so the doctor hospitalized her to closely monitor her kidneY function during the treatment.
At the hospital, a long journey started.
By the way, what is "Aldo"? Also, I just looked up "swell" and saw that it is not a transitive verb, so you can consider that one a correction. :-)
Thanks Matt. You will learn who is Aldo later.
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