The alarm clock went off. It
was seven o’clock of the morning of a cold day at the very beginning of
December. Christopher Mash was waking up from his uncomfortable sleep. He had
not been sleeping well for months after having been fired from the company to
which he had been devoted to for twenty years. Never had he thought that he was
going to get through the devastating experience of being unemployed and he did
not really know what life had in stored for him.
Christopher’s discouragement
grew bigger and bigger since he was not able to find a new job. His lovely
wife, Evelyn, trying to encourage him, went with him on what appears to be job
hunting, but to no avail.
One day, while they were
cooking nougat, a question crossed Christopher’s
mind, “Why do not we make as much nougat as to sweeten the lives of those who are even in a
worse precarious situation than us and
do not have enough money to even buy a small portion for their children?”. He
told his wife about his idea and she appeared to be very interested in it,
though what she really wished was to see him happy.
They both decided to spend
part of Christopher’s redundancy pay on buying the ingredients needed so as to
make the nougat, sugar, almonds and honey. Love had been spilled over their
hearts without seeking anything in exchange and with the only aim of turning
people’s disappointment and lack of illusion into a small portion of happiness
by giving them away something to all lights insignificant, but important enough
so as to make them feel the Christmas spirit.
The goodness of their action
was quickly spread around their city and unleashed a tide of love among its
dwellers who, following the couple example, delivered a storm of gifts and
staple goods over the heads of the poorest people of the city.
Not only were Evelyn and
Christopher able to draw a smile on poor people’s face at Christmas but they
also laid the foundations for what is, this day and age, a successful artisan nougat
factory which helped them to fill every Christmas with joy and fun.
The alarm clock went off. It was seven o’clock ON the morning of a cold day at the very beginning of December. Christopher Mash was waking up from his uncomfortable sleep. He had not been sleeping well for months after having been fired from the company to which he had been devoted [] for twenty years. Never had he thought that he was going to get through the devastating experience of being unemployed and he did not really know what life had in storE for him.
ReplyDeleteChristopher’s discouragement grew bigger and bigger since he was not able to find a new job. His lovely wife, Evelyn, trying to encourage him, went with him on what appearED to(1) be job hunting, but to no avail.
One day, while they were cooking nougat, a question crossed Christopher’s mind, “Why do we NOT make as much nougat as WOULD sweeten the lives of those who are even in a MORE precarious situation than WE ARE, and do not have enough money to even buy a small portion for their children?” He told his wife about his idea and she appeared to be(1) very interested in it, though what she really wished was to see him happy.
They both decided to spend part of Christopher’s redundancy pay on buying the ingredients needed [] to make the nougat: sugar, almonds and honey. Love had [] spilled over IN their hearts without seeking anything in exchange and with the only aim of turning people’s disappointment and lack of HOPE into a small portion of happiness by giving them [] something to all lights insignificant, but important enough so as to make them feel the Christmas spirit.
The goodness of their action was quickly spread around their city and unleashed a tide of love among its dwellers who, following the couple'S example, delivered a storm of gifts and staple goods over the heads of the poorest people of the city.
Not only were Evelyn and Christopher able to draw a smile on poor people’s faceS at Christmas but they also laid the foundations for what is, IN this day and age, a successful artisan nougat factory which helped them to fill every Christmas with joy and fun.
The phrase "appeared to be" implies that it wasn't really true. I think this is a stronger negative than you intended. Maybe:
...she went with him on what passed for job hunting.
...she expressed interest in it, though...
Thanks for your wise comments Matt.
ReplyDeleteI always find them very useful in order to improve.
I've made too many basic mistakes. I should pull my socks up again.......
Vic