(Picture by Leslie Anneliese)
With haughtiness the bird began to speak:
B: Have you ever been in the blue sky?
F: No, I haven't, but I have been in the blue and fascinating ocean full of life and mistery.
B: Have you ever touched the stars?
F: No, I haven't, but I have touched the brightest reefs on earth full of light and color.
B: Have you ever danced on the clouds?
F: No, I haven't, but I have danced over foamy waves following with my fins the rhythm of the sea.
B: Have you ever flown to the most remote heights?
F: No, I haven't, but I have swum through the dizzying currents reaching the deepest of the ocean.
The bird kept silence. It understood that that humble fish had a "sky" too: blue, vast, full of misteries, challenging , magnificent and hearthwarming! The bird smiled and fluttering it rose to the sky again!
P.S: There is a "PRESENT PERFECT CHALLENGE" on a site where I practice my writing sometimes. I wrote this one. It is short and simple.
I think the members of this blog can do the same in English or in Spanish if they want to. It must be a short dialogue using the present perfect tense: between people, pets, abstract things...... You can write whatever you want to.....using that tense.
After the "conditional challenge.....I need a rest..
I still have a doubt: when I speak about the bird and the fish I used "it" and "its"......but I could use "he" and "his" too, right?
Thansk in advance!!
I still have a doubt: when I speak about the bird and the fish I used "it" and "its"......but I could use "he" and "his" too, right?
Thansk in advance!!
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I love the picture.
A majestic bird with golden plumage landed on a rock in front of the ocean. A tiny fish poked [out] its head[,] drawn by the beauty of the bird.
With haughtiness the bird began to speak:
B: Have you ever been in the blue sky?
F: No, I haven't, but I have been in the blue and fascinating ocean full of life and m[y]stery.
B: Have you ever touched the stars?
F: No, I haven't, but I have touched the brightest reefs on earth full of light and color.
B: Have you ever danced on the clouds?
F: No, I haven't, but I have danced over foamy waves following with my fins the rhythm of the sea.
B: Have you ever flown to the most remote heights?
F: No, I haven't, but I have swum through the dizzying currents reaching the deepest of the ocean.
"the deepest" is OK. "the deepest part" or "the depths" might be better.
The bird kept silence. It understood that that humble fish had a "sky" too: blue, vast, full of m[y]steries, challenging, magnificent and heart[]warming! The bird smiled and, fluttering, it rose to the sky again!
I will think about your "PRESENT PERFECT CHALLENGE".
I still have a doubt: when I speak about the bird and the fish I used "it" and "its"......but I could use "he" and "his" too, right?
Yes. "He" and "his", or "she" and "her(s)", would make the characters more personal and human.
I liked this vocabulary:
majestic
poked out
haughtiness
the rhythm of the sea
dizzying currents
fluttering
Thank you for your comments, all of them are really helpful!
ReplyDeleteI think the same: that picture is awesome!
I only want congratulate you for your expert and poetic use of English
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Albert for your comment! I really appreciate it. You are doing a great job too. I liked "The English Breakfast".
ReplyDeleteHello Fanny, I liked too much the poem. I don't recognize many words but I can feel the warm relationship between the Bird and the Fish.
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